Comments on Trying To Be Clever: Round Robin, Sophie From Shinola Part 5

The whole point of this kind of thing is to watch ...

2008-03-31T17:49:00.000-05:00

The whole point of this kind of thing is to watch the tale wind left and right and roundabout. You can never tell where a story is going to end up--you shouldn't be able to tell.

Whether it's just a dream or not, it's interesting to see where people go with things.

I'll note that having Sophie's change being upsetting to her is, of itself, an interesting change from where I might have gone on my own; if this were something I was doing all by myself (sequeling myself on ficlets, for instance), I might have had Sophie transmitting a letter home and surrealistically talking about how much fun she has zooming around and making things go bloosh ("except, mommy, nothing sounds like anything out here, I just make a blooshing noise in my brain when I blow it up--it's fun!"). But it isn't my story, it's our story: it's likely that my twist (install a brain directly into the ship) wasn't what Nathan or Shawn had in mind when they did started the story.

"Poor Eric" nothing--it would be poor me if everyone else wrote the exact same thing I did, because it would mean none of us were particularly clever. I like being surprised.

An excellent sequel, Matt.

Part 6 is done, here.Enjoy. I think. ;)

2008-03-31T15:34:00.000-05:00

Part 6 is done, here.

Enjoy. I think. ;)

Actually, I just assumed that Sophie's possession ...

2008-03-31T13:21:00.001-05:00

Actually, I just assumed that Sophie's possession was being treated as MPD by the medical personnel.

Kinda like... never mind. I just over geeked myself.

To clarify (and possibly make things worse for me ...

2008-03-31T13:21:00.000-05:00

To clarify (and possibly make things worse for me when Eric reads this), I didn't mean my comment in the spirit of "bad Matt! don't do that again!" It was more of a "bwahahaha! Alas poor Eric, we knew him..."

The funny thing is that when I hadn't heard anythi...

2008-03-31T13:15:00.000-05:00

The funny thing is that when I hadn't heard anything from Matt by late this morning, I sent him an email asking if he was ready or should we come back to him. I Also emailed Jeri to let her know that she might be on deck. Matt's response that he'd posted his and Jeri's "standing by" response showed up withing seconds of each other.

Jeri jokingly said that Eric's entry was going to be a tough act to follow and threatened to do an "It was all just a dream" entry.

Well, I think its funny. :D

This kind of blog game leaves toes completely out ...

2008-03-31T13:05:00.000-05:00

This kind of blog game leaves toes completely out for the stepping. Even if they are stepped on, no one is allowed to get upset. :)

Blink could easily be eaten by a dinosaur any minute now... Or Sophie's mom could actually remove her brain. And eat it, what with her new zombie persona (that she might get, who knows!)...

I liked the installment, Matt. :)

I didn't intend for Eric's part to be turned into ...

2008-03-31T13:01:00.000-05:00

I didn't intend for Eric's part to be turned into an "it all happened in a dream" kind of part. I figured she could still be turned into a ship of some kind, but her mind would then let the alien personality take over and deal with it. But then again, it's open to interpretation and people can take it however they want in creating the following parts.

Sorry if I stepped on anyone's toes.

Awww, poor small brown creature.And poor Eric too,...

2008-03-31T12:48:00.000-05:00

Awww, poor small brown creature.

And poor Eric too, for having his part turned into an "it was all a dream." ;)

I think Eric's part could still have happened to h...

2008-03-31T12:41:00.000-05:00

I think Eric's part could still have happened to her (that would be the pain and fear that Blink detects). That would be a prime example of why the "alien" personality is needed, to cope with things that are beyond an 11-year-old's ability to comprehend. I guess, though, it will all depend on what Jeri and future contributors decide if those experiences really happened to her.

I'm still waiting for somebody to turn her into a ...

2008-03-31T12:31:00.000-05:00

I'm still waiting for somebody to turn her into a SpaceHooker. Is that so much to ask?

Matt,

I caught the change. Did she hallucinate Eric's part?

I love Blink. :) Also, I like that Sophie changed...

2008-03-31T12:24:00.000-05:00

I love Blink. :) Also, I like that Sophie changed from an alien hybrid to a plain old mental case. What an amazing little girl! (well, girl for now...)

;)

Ah, gotcha. It's kind of related to my second gues...

2008-03-31T12:23:00.000-05:00

Ah, gotcha. It's kind of related to my second guess. Very creative idea! Paranoid delusions and hallucinations are always fun to write. (I'm not being facetious, they were the core of my Nanowrimo book and, in the end, the best sections)

I wanted to make sure I understood yours before I dive into my section.

Can I have a Blink of my own? He seems much smarter than my idiot doggies. ;)

The change was that the alien that has taken over ...

2008-03-31T12:16:00.000-05:00

The change was that the alien that has taken over Sophie isn't an alien, but another personality. That Sophie's got split personality disorder and the "alien" is a defense mechanism. That's all my sitting at work, fighting off a cold brain could come up with this morning.

Also, I wanted to flesh out Blink some more.

I may be insufficiently caffeinated this morning.W...

2008-03-31T12:08:00.000-05:00

I may be insufficiently caffeinated this morning.

Was your subtle change that Blink is now a he?

Or was it that in your timeline nutty Sophie has not yet entered spaceforce?

Or am I missing it entirely?

Nice job fleshing out Blink, he's starting to take shape as a character.

I know we have to change a fundamental element of ...

2008-03-31T11:17:00.000-05:00

I know we have to change a fundamental element of the story, and I think I made the change subtle.